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Old 09-12-2020, 09:39 AM   #1
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Trig A rose

I see petals,
Petals of a withered flower
Scattered on the ground.
She was once beautiful,
A glorious rose.
But wind and sun has
extracted her youth.
Misery has set her seal
Upon her life.
Death is embracing her coldly.
But loyal is the loneliness.
'he' is a star she can't reach
For that her heart breaks.
Blurry is her vision
As tears decor her eyes.
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Old 09-15-2020, 02:58 PM   #2
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Raw but the elements are there to make something truly timeless out of an already beautiful piece. I will PM you my constructive critique so that I may contribute to sharpening your already-pointed pen. Kudos.
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Thank you for sharing!
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